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Nov 3, 2008 11:54:10 GMT -5
Post by Johnny Truant on Nov 3, 2008 11:54:10 GMT -5
Muffle theocracy when outcry sweeps my homeland Spread governing prophets around complex surroundings "He in the clouds found vanity" Nevertheless, premeditated atrocities continually shimmer
-JT
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Revolt
Nov 3, 2008 15:18:01 GMT -5
Post by matw63 on Nov 3, 2008 15:18:01 GMT -5
caught in one's own mind prison, seeking all the wrong things.
well penned
mat
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Revolt
Nov 3, 2008 16:11:51 GMT -5
Post by tsu on Nov 3, 2008 16:11:51 GMT -5
nice to see you in drops! you managed to convey a such darkness in this drop..i love the line.."premeditated atrocities continually shimmer"..undercurrents of unspeakable things! wonderful drop!
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Nov 4, 2008 17:17:13 GMT -5
Post by Created2Write on Nov 4, 2008 17:17:13 GMT -5
this was a good drop. you conveyed your thoughts really well. Peace, C2W
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Nov 26, 2008 18:38:26 GMT -5
Post by olivialuka131313 on Nov 26, 2008 18:38:26 GMT -5
Oh wow, I would never have guessed that you had a restriction on words here, each word fits perfectly not only in its meaning but in the feeling it evokes and the way it rolls off the tongue when you say this piece out loud. I loved this, especially the last two lines, great work.
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