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Mar 29, 2009 15:59:35 GMT -5
Post by thehippyboy on Mar 29, 2009 15:59:35 GMT -5
wait! the philosopher died wait! he spun low, gasping offers wait! we migrate around the public now, oppressed in sanity wait... he died? wait... excess laughs at our propaganda? she died he died we died she died the crawling insect
wait! the philosopher died??
wait! the oppressive phi
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Mar 29, 2009 21:05:08 GMT -5
Post by bcoyotey on Mar 29, 2009 21:05:08 GMT -5
hippieboy, the repetition in this Drops makes the flow smooth and adds an extra exclamation point that emphasizes the whole poem. Impressive. Lady B
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Apr 4, 2009 15:31:51 GMT -5
Post by bobswife4ever (surgery soon) on Apr 4, 2009 15:31:51 GMT -5
I really loved how you used repetition for effect in this one. It really kicked it up a notch. Very impacting and emotional. The following was my favorite:
I look forward to reading more from you throughout the boards here at TPS. Keep up the good work.
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Apr 12, 2009 0:13:07 GMT -5
Post by macboogiewoogie on Apr 12, 2009 0:13:07 GMT -5
I like how the poem seemed pieced together in a way, but you connected everything through repetition so that it fell together nicely. I'm not sure if it was supposed to be comic.. but I was amused by it.
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Apr 15, 2009 19:46:07 GMT -5
Post by jabeau on Apr 15, 2009 19:46:07 GMT -5
It was wonderful write. You portrayed the confusion that people can go through very well. I look forward to more posts.
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