chizl
Wandering Muse
Posts: 90
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Post by chizl on Jul 3, 2009 18:37:20 GMT -5
Vunerable dawn discourages regret Heaven explodes Patience sings
Ideology stretches above hypothetical sea Foams skips sails Compresses black swamps beneath bone Affects each appraoching tangent
Split inertia encourages dispute Promising logical outlook
Fakes concealed Beginner declared
Desire swears obscure
The Daytime substitute
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Post by bobswife4ever (surgery soon) on Jul 7, 2009 11:57:37 GMT -5
I loved this beautiful drops poem, but the following was my favorite: That was just a beautifully penned stanza to me. Keep them coming.
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Post by dustili on Jul 16, 2009 23:01:09 GMT -5
I love the way you put this together, it was very expressive and a good write cool....
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 29, 2009 5:43:23 GMT -5
i really enjoyed this, so very beautiful with good imagery and a lovely sense of flow. Great work.
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Post by Donta' Mason= Mazbaby(in&out) on Nov 18, 2009 13:43:36 GMT -5
well done the first line is a very good grabber
it flows good, and enjoyably read
fantastic drop of poetry
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