djmer
Established Muse
Posts: 130
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Post by djmer on Nov 10, 2009 18:16:32 GMT -5
Telescope beneath each plane: Heaven is inertia, dawn rots, patience explodes... when ideology discourages hypothetical.
How is it spiritual?
Dispute substitutes desire, regret, a prominent device.
Teacher concealed regret, obscured swears, blackmailed me.
Heaven is hypothetical.
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Post by bcoyotey on Nov 14, 2009 17:48:24 GMT -5
dj, This is a very well thought out Drops piece. Kudos, my friend. Lady B
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Post by bobswife4ever (surgery soon) on Nov 16, 2009 13:12:19 GMT -5
Very interesting and though provoking drops poem. Nicely done.
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Post by clearbluespark on Jan 13, 2010 21:06:41 GMT -5
Great drops Dj...I love the title and how it turned out to be the last line...
Nice work,
G.
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Post by tonaleclipse on Jan 18, 2010 8:11:35 GMT -5
I love how you play with indecision and substitution. It gives depth to a short piece.
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Post by Darksider Blue on Feb 27, 2010 22:42:10 GMT -5
"when ideology discourages hypothetical"
It was a difficult decision, with so many great lines in this piece, but I think this has to be my favorite. Its a very deep piece. very well done. -First Star of Dawn
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 28, 2010 21:27:40 GMT -5
dj-What an exciting and provocative poem. Well done! molly
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Post by venialst on Jul 9, 2010 6:59:42 GMT -5
gives a big though a short piece i like it XD
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