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Heresy
May 23, 2010 17:21:41 GMT -5
Post by solitude on May 23, 2010 17:21:41 GMT -5
She rages at the heresy of her near faithful darling Blackmailed with the memories that emerge now in doubt Transformed and renewed she wanders void of hope Her script now revised with the horrors circling down
It was forseeable that rubbish would choose her as the center A constant audience of disadvantage triggered though the air A confidential whistle to stamp on her desirable flight The procedure coordinated to steal all outstanding hope
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Heresy
May 31, 2010 12:54:14 GMT -5
Post by Donta' Mason= Mazbaby(in&out) on May 31, 2010 12:54:14 GMT -5
this poem reached easily, profound wording and delight I really enjoyed from intro to ending
speaking of your ending to this poem, it was very powerful and lasting
awsome job!
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Heresy
Jul 1, 2010 17:08:49 GMT -5
Post by ॐ Hemz ॐ on Jul 1, 2010 17:08:49 GMT -5
This has a good structure with some similar sounds matching up within such as constant and confidential and renewed and revised. A fitting drop of poetry with mystery.
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Heresy
Jul 4, 2010 19:27:34 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 4, 2010 19:27:34 GMT -5
I loved the last line of this, a strong and well written drops piece.
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Heresy
Apr 3, 2011 20:05:15 GMT -5
Post by (k) shades of silence on Apr 3, 2011 20:05:15 GMT -5
This is amazing. It is rare for me to find a Poetry Drop that doesn't look like one, and you have pulled it off, ma'am. The emotions were real and they were striking. [EXALT!] Oh, and I haven't seen you on here in quite some time. It's good to read you again.
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