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Post by oursummertrees. on Jul 7, 2010 1:20:01 GMT -5
"It is desirable rubbish, darling," he swore -
whistling, he pocketed the stiff confidential envelope after she'd examined the photographic memories, her stolen digital signature
hypothetical horror previewed, the disadvantage triggered transformation - she emerged roped over incentives, swearing renewed faithfulness
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Post by thememoryflowered on Jul 7, 2010 14:34:32 GMT -5
Darn...
I've exalted you too many times today apparently and will have to wait a little while before I can do it again...but I will, because this is fantastic! I know how much you feel you struggle with drops, but you really do have a talent for it.
Absolutely loved the inspiration behind this, and you really have weaved it together so tightly, the best thing I feel I can say about this is that it doesn't read like a DOP at all...it isn't forced and certianly doesn't have the feel of something that had to be built, it flows so well. I really am so very impressed.
exalt paid
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 7, 2010 19:32:32 GMT -5
wow trees, this was brilliant, i loved the tightness of it the opening line was spot on and the ending beautifully done. Awesome drops
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Post by venialst on Jul 9, 2010 9:00:30 GMT -5
I liked the first two lines it was sounding joyful and exited then it flowed into something dark then back
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Post by spence [tornado weather] on Jul 15, 2010 13:10:43 GMT -5
Someday, I'm going to figure out how you're made of so much win, and then I'll steal borrow some of it. This is, as usual, outstanding on its own, and even more-so within the parameters of what you had to work with. Hats off to you.
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Post by oursummertrees. on Jul 15, 2010 23:18:40 GMT -5
Thanks you guys! I wasn't sure how I felt about this, so you've made me look at it differently and kinda appreciate it for what it is.
spence - can we trade win? I mean...I'm a bit covetous of yours at the moment because of your recent OM!
-Trees
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Post by spence [tornado weather] on Jul 16, 2010 10:33:20 GMT -5
spence - can we trade win? I mean...I'm a bit covetous of yours at the moment because of your recent OM! ;D I would trade win with you in a heartbeat, because your win is consistent, whereas mine is fickle and the victim of an often surly muse. (Which seems to be the result of taking an Introductory Poetry class this past Spring as a way to pad my Sophomore GPA... Learning is, apparently, bad for you.) Can we trade win online, do you think? Is it a PayPal transaction?
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chizl
Wandering Muse
Posts: 90
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Post by chizl on Jul 19, 2010 8:09:13 GMT -5
Wow...i couldn't commend you any better than those before me have.
In awe. =)
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Post by inflames on Aug 3, 2010 16:35:21 GMT -5
This is amazingly well done. Such a provocative piece for a drop.
I enjoyed.
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Post by bobbyjohnson on Aug 13, 2010 13:03:41 GMT -5
Very good! It's hard using these words!
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Post by thehippyboy on Aug 13, 2010 20:23:05 GMT -5
This was an awesome poem. You managed to tell an engaging story with such a limited word choice.
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Post by Musie (Breathing deeply) on Aug 14, 2010 9:45:55 GMT -5
trees..it is written so very well, in such few creative word's as to capture one's attention, as to the Title...Well done poet....enjoyed...musie
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