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Post by bobbyjohnson on Aug 13, 2010 12:52:45 GMT -5
Economic
Farmer swears horror to a planetary void, Audience rages after alien transformation, Administrative address doubles desirable rubbish, Capitalist whistles how playground is constant, Company warrant blackmail in foreseeable procedure, Dealer speaks faithful hypothetical heresy, Examiner emerges revised doubt confidential, Specialist excepts incentive, widest uniform pocket, Mole steals envelope then flies, Pope: "can't steer admirable vessel!" he barks, Cousin explodes beneath racial disadvantage, Daughter rolls down frequent memory digital, Darling speaks art, stiff muscle memory, Vet listens next, signal renewing, Eccentric pokes trigger, it pumps top over, Fairy flutes friendly photographic preview, My hope is wandering.
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Post by thehippyboy on Aug 13, 2010 20:21:12 GMT -5
You managed to get a meter going in a drops poem. It flows superbly and tells a very surreal and interesting story. Congratulations, and I think I'm going to have to give you an exalt.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 31, 2010 22:32:05 GMT -5
excellent rhythm with this from start to finish I was captivated.
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Post by rayofsun on Sept 26, 2010 11:32:35 GMT -5
I too felt a driving force behind this poem, not sure if it's anger or angst or disappointment but it is good! A really great drops piece.
rae
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Post by Lady Wildalice on Sept 27, 2010 12:35:20 GMT -5
A hard thing to accomplish in a drops piece. Good movement and great delivery. I also sense some anger..........maybe more like disappointment in this. Good job.
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Post by Max on Sept 27, 2010 22:45:37 GMT -5
I really enjoyed the alliterations you gave us here, it gave the poem a delightful flow at times that made the piece seem organic. The poem you have created is intelligently crafted, and provides some heavy pictures for the reader to pause at. Really nice job with this... this looks like you really took some time to mold this in fine fashion!
-Max
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Post by dragonfilth on Jan 22, 2011 19:25:45 GMT -5
wow i felt like i was part of a UFO invasion Oh.... my lights are staying on tonight
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