tkeyah14
Wandering Muse
mon sort
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Post by tkeyah14 on Mar 1, 2011 22:19:52 GMT -5
its these four walls my tired hands beat because its the world that my eyes want to see i only wanted to be me please oh please let me be free trapped inside your wrongful labels you turned my life into one big fable no matter where i go you'll be a part of me if i would've payed attention danger is what i would've seen why wont you let me free my name is trapped in between all of your lips because of the way i sway my hips trapped behind this emotional wall waiting for the barrier to fall
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Post by inflames on Mar 20, 2011 18:57:38 GMT -5
I'm amazed you were able to get rhyme in here- that shows some skill! Great work.
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Post by Linaeve {Ever Smiling} on Mar 21, 2011 16:16:11 GMT -5
Such longing! And I agree with Inflames. Great work!
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Post by theDSW on Mar 24, 2011 3:34:56 GMT -5
This is a good poem but unclear of where a few words were chosen...
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tkeyah14
Wandering Muse
mon sort
Posts: 10
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Post by tkeyah14 on Mar 28, 2011 21:06:47 GMT -5
thanks guys... i've always wanted an second opinion on my poetry(im attempting to get better )... this is the first time i've ever posted or showed my poetry to any one
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