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Post by C/1Lt alonelyindividual on Apr 16, 2011 0:22:45 GMT -5
A silent noise, When he attacks. Another injury, She won't run. It is unsafe to run. She must cooperate. The wrongs get tiring. Why must she cooperate? Another injury, When he attacks, A silent noise...
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Post by C/1Lt alonelyindividual on Apr 16, 2011 0:23:42 GMT -5
I don't know why, but as soon as I saw 'Silent' and 'Noise' in that word bank, this is what jumped into my head.
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Post by bcoyotey on Apr 17, 2011 16:28:42 GMT -5
This is a gripping and emotional Drops ALI. You didn't need to describe the thought process or what was going on. It is apparent in the piece itself. Powerful read. Lady B
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Post by - Moirae - on Apr 18, 2011 7:15:55 GMT -5
Wow, the power you put into this short piece is astounding. I agree with Lady B, the poem told the story itself. Amazing work!
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Apr 18, 2011 7:36:47 GMT -5
The idea of a silent noise is just chilling especialyl in context. Very strong drops.
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Post by C/1Lt alonelyindividual on Apr 18, 2011 20:37:18 GMT -5
And who'da thunk that a soon-to-be Army boy from South Cackalackey (scientific redneck spelling) would write a "gripping and emotional" (quoted Lady B) poem about domestic violence? I don't know where this stuff comes from...
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