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Post by Shiloh on Jul 19, 2011 0:08:53 GMT -5
Problems painted pimples, under silent barn eyes Tousled hair, bright opened skin, head back She flopped tail over... black/white floor tiles, loosened
E v a p o r a t e d
Family returned, Five eggs nest... Marched, Entered front steps... Boy walked past it, jelly splashed hallway Leading to confusing sprinted dash Maids shrugged each other off He removed one tie, Were? Won't? Why?...Is tough work.
White coat it is!
The whole world's fiction (few read) In Hickory Hill House.(Pocketbook bog)
Barking walls Cannonballed shoes Governess Goose, "Nurse" Children bared lion teeth...when pushed Edge flipped flounder wildly quick Lifted, kicked open a door Threw suit
Sardines!
Pail, water, jar
F l o a t Dove
Good weather today... Fresh sea air, shining star surface Swimming inside an enormous Cool pool formed Fresh large lawn smelled
NewFoundLand
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Post by doeangel on Jul 19, 2011 0:48:19 GMT -5
Hi Shiloh I must admit; I'm not use to your type of writing nor am I familiar with it, but what I can truly say is; "Wow!!! This is a new 'Newfoundland'" from my stand point. It does peak my thoughts. Nice job... I think
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 19, 2011 3:39:26 GMT -5
Wow such a detailed drops piece, from open to close brilliant. Very much enjoyed.
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Post by Riverrose ~April!!!~ on Jul 21, 2011 9:56:12 GMT -5
I love this! You put the words together in a way that may not make perfect grammatical sense, but also so that I still so vividly see the scene you present. Very clever, Riverrose
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Post by Shiloh on Jul 21, 2011 21:51:55 GMT -5
Thanks for reading, and thank you for commenting. Every now and again I try to fit all the words available in their given form, used once. It's like a bunch of puzzle pieces and this was the finished picture. It was fun to write.
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