kobryn
Wandering Muse
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Post by kobryn on Aug 20, 2011 14:12:44 GMT -5
He dove swimming The cool water painted over his skin.
To air. The surface. He entered the weather and returned to the world's problems.
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Post by Sir Daniel on Aug 20, 2011 18:12:26 GMT -5
very interesting list of words this month and you were able to pull out from them this lovely poem. I am sure that like most poetry, there are many meanings but when I read it I thought about how you dive in water and while your underwater you are in another world.. your priorities change, breathing becomes the most important yet the lack of gravity gives you freedom you won't find anywhere else.. then you come back up out of water and into the same world you left.
really enjoyed, take care.
~ Daniel
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Post by - Moirae - on Aug 21, 2011 18:07:25 GMT -5
I love the description of the sense of relief the character feels plunging into the sea and the anxiety of returning to the reality of the surface. Very well communicated. I enjoyed reading.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 23, 2011 21:50:16 GMT -5
Awesome drops, simple but brilliantly effective. Very much enjoyed this.
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Post by ~k~(tornadoes) on Aug 31, 2011 2:21:31 GMT -5
Such an awesome bit of writing. I really enjoyed reading this
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