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Post by son of CHA! on Sept 22, 2011 17:50:24 GMT -5
head jarred forming shining eyes, silenced floundering, floating; whole. bog air swimming inside his head wildly bared teeth opened over brightened painted weather open, surfaced under lifted dove, he removed his confusing skin suit,. returned.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Sept 22, 2011 21:52:59 GMT -5
A clever and interesting drop, I liked the sense of adventure to it. Neat write.
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Post by AoR on Sept 23, 2011 14:51:45 GMT -5
A fascinating write. The wording here makes for a delightful read, great drop piece! "opened over brightened painted weather open, surfaced under lifted dove he removed his confusing skin suit, returned."
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Post by - Moirae - on Sept 23, 2011 19:33:40 GMT -5
CHA, I have missed reading your work and I agree with Jah about the sense of adventure in this poem. Great drops!
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Post by son of CHA! on Sept 25, 2011 19:35:40 GMT -5
much thanks for the time, the read, and all the kind words,. trying to work to getting my pen re-geared.
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Post by dragonfilth on Sept 30, 2011 8:39:04 GMT -5
this is neat i like and the words you were given to use simply awesome what a great talent to mesh them together
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