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Post by TheDarkHumour {Waiting} on Nov 3, 2011 9:20:40 GMT -5
One surface under cool eyes. Five enormous steps leading inside. Why won't good children read wildly? The swimming walls painted bright black.
Today is a kicked lion. An evaporated family returned. White door, white hallway, Hickory floor tiles float silent
Open water opened each pocketbook; Cannonballed tousled hair splashed it. Confusing nursemaids were marched in. Sea to bog problems flopped.
Fiction.
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Post by shiz♥k3sa on Nov 4, 2011 4:34:24 GMT -5
I like it. Especially the line: Today is a kicked lion, brilliant
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 4, 2011 5:52:02 GMT -5
A great drop, very much enjoyed. Loved that stand alone final line, very effective piece.
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Nov 6, 2011 19:48:03 GMT -5
Post by bcoyotey on Nov 6, 2011 19:48:03 GMT -5
Today is a kicked lion. An evaporated family returned. White door, white hallway, Hickory floor tiles float silent
Impressive Drops TDH. Very heartfelt with great imagery. Lady B
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Post by Sir Daniel on Nov 7, 2011 6:17:53 GMT -5
one of the best things about drops poems is because of the limited word choice, we wind up writing such imaginary stanzas that even following along is like suspending reality. Really enjoyed, take care.
~ Daniel
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Nov 7, 2011 13:38:56 GMT -5
Post by TheDarkHumour {Waiting} on Nov 7, 2011 13:38:56 GMT -5
Thank you all so much for the feedback!
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Nov 7, 2011 14:19:42 GMT -5
Post by ॐ Hemz ॐ on Nov 7, 2011 14:19:42 GMT -5
Most entertaining. Glad to have caught this droplet.
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