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Post by thehippyboy on Nov 12, 2011 13:01:29 GMT -5
Newfoundland Lions kicked one nurse back inside pooling stars nesting in evaporated houses. Cannonballed, a boy formed, swimming off a cool edge leading bright water, pushing over white hallways.
"To air!", children quickly shrugged, hair removed and splashed, returning to silent sea, shining. Whole geese loosened few problems, weather tousled painted pools, confusing black lions. A boy formed, cannonballed, kicking one nurse off a cool edge.
Newfoundland lions lead children to silent seas.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 22, 2011 4:24:49 GMT -5
Wow, so much to enjoy in this, I love that second stanza. Brilliant drops.
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Post by Chelle on Nov 27, 2011 18:03:53 GMT -5
i preferred the second stanza as well. thanks for sharing this drops poem with us!
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Post by - Moirae - on Dec 6, 2011 17:41:35 GMT -5
What a great story you were able to write with drops! I doesn't read like you were limited to your words at all. Very nicely done. I agree with the others, the second stanza is great.
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Post by Sir Daniel on Dec 11, 2011 17:00:19 GMT -5
having attempted this list of words myself, I can feel the restrictions you had to work with and I know how they force us to guide our poem into waters we may not have expected to be in, however you did an amazing job of making this happen and in a way your reader can understand.
enjoyed much, take care
~ Daniel
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