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Dec 30, 2011 13:10:33 GMT -5
Post by Chelle on Dec 30, 2011 13:10:33 GMT -5
Timing clock please stop Gravity won't worry Open busy urbanization discreetly Refresh blind religion Covering vast geographically critical places Cancelling inconsistent biochemistry Streetlights leveling tall shame Lowering wealth Reducing overhead Combining prime heartland referenced in sale Authorized misstatement illumining necessary chopping Why is it replacing songbirds' sounding
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Dec 31, 2011 0:14:19 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Dec 31, 2011 0:14:19 GMT -5
Wow Chelle! A brilliant drops with an elegant flow and a strong message, really loved that ending. Awesome work.
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Dec 31, 2011 0:19:04 GMT -5
Post by djk ~ 8000 on Dec 31, 2011 0:19:04 GMT -5
Truly eloquent, rich and enjoyable Chelle.
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Dec 31, 2011 16:02:56 GMT -5
Post by bcoyotey on Dec 31, 2011 16:02:56 GMT -5
Incredibly rich Drops Chelle. The opening line led the way down the corridors until time itself truly seemed to speed up.
Why is it replacing songbirds' sounding
That last line was remarkable in not only closing, but showing the blurred frenzy. Exalt. Lady B
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Jan 6, 2012 0:31:54 GMT -5
Post by Musie (Breathing deeply) on Jan 6, 2012 0:31:54 GMT -5
Chelle~I think you touched on about every issue there has been in the old year..and written oh so well, really a nice drop piece....truly enjoyed....the last line "Why is it replacing songbirds' sounding" was really a brilliant way to end this, sad and just went straight to my heart's soul...that image.....musie
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anonamanda
Wandering Muse
I've been lost so long
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Jan 8, 2012 15:41:41 GMT -5
Post by anonamanda on Jan 8, 2012 15:41:41 GMT -5
Gracefully penned and beautiful. The last line really struck me. Great!
Anon
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Jan 12, 2012 22:47:33 GMT -5
Post by windowflower on Jan 12, 2012 22:47:33 GMT -5
You have managed to use these word prompts to not only create an intelligent piece of poetry, but to also make an accurate statement on the state of this natural world.
Why is it replacing songbirds' sounding , indeed. I will exalt this.
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