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Post by AlienFaery on Sept 15, 2004 2:06:07 GMT -5
This is my first attempt at this. - M I found the door To your naked secret In a hollow moment That tasted of death, When I saw beneath the Haunted anguish in your eyes.
The ghosts that were buried In your heart Danced free And you were like a Wasted star, A truth that never was...
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Sept 15, 2004 4:02:24 GMT -5
Wow, that was great! Amazing how random words can create amazing poems. I love the wording and symbolism. Very nice, I love it ;D
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Post by ThousandFaces on Sept 15, 2004 17:19:29 GMT -5
"Haunted anguish in your eyes"
I have got to try writing one of these poems. The results are fantastic! B
Encore!
Your Humble and Obedient Servant,
T.F.
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Post by DaimeanAastonLlatt on Sept 17, 2004 2:20:31 GMT -5
Great job.
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Post by waterlily07 on Sept 18, 2004 19:54:46 GMT -5
Wow...love the imagery here.
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Post by AlienFaery on Sept 26, 2004 1:54:52 GMT -5
Thanks for the comments I think it might be fun to give this "Drops of Poetry" thing another go. - M
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Post by Kasurin on Oct 11, 2004 9:25:10 GMT -5
When I saw the title "wasted " I was thining of another meaning... But anyway, I do like the vividness in your poem. It speaks about loss and it's great.
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matt77
Wandering Muse
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Post by matt77 on Oct 11, 2004 11:58:40 GMT -5
wow, nice choice of word, well done!
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Post by Shola on Oct 14, 2004 9:19:15 GMT -5
Wow, that was...amazing!
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