dayna
Established Muse
I might spend some time downstairs. ~The Incredible String Band~
Posts: 245
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Jan 5, 2005 12:46:36 GMT -5
Post by dayna on Jan 5, 2005 12:46:36 GMT -5
Poet, Did you not melt the moon? Your quiet anguish A vanilla rhyme in spring? Hot breath is delicious to the anguished. I laid buried, frigid in the snow, I am naked where I fell.
Wasted star, Desire was not made an art, You never possesed my joy.
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Jan 9, 2005 4:11:06 GMT -5
Post by SilverWolverine on Jan 9, 2005 4:11:06 GMT -5
dont catch the thread in this sorry looks neat though
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dayna
Established Muse
I might spend some time downstairs. ~The Incredible String Band~
Posts: 245
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Poet
Jan 10, 2005 14:47:00 GMT -5
Post by dayna on Jan 10, 2005 14:47:00 GMT -5
yeah I'm not really sure I no wot i was getting at either, Ive learned my lesson, only try these things once per page of words, used up all my good ideas on the Thief.
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Jan 14, 2005 23:52:25 GMT -5
Post by Sketchy (love is a w----) on Jan 14, 2005 23:52:25 GMT -5
I liked the imagery, no matter what you were trying to convey. ^^- It's some interesting thoughts.
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Jan 18, 2005 12:15:38 GMT -5
Post by ॐ Hemz ॐ on Jan 18, 2005 12:15:38 GMT -5
Incredible.
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dayna
Established Muse
I might spend some time downstairs. ~The Incredible String Band~
Posts: 245
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Jan 18, 2005 13:32:38 GMT -5
Post by dayna on Jan 18, 2005 13:32:38 GMT -5
wow thank you, im not sure it's quite worthy of such a nice comment, but thanks a million ;D
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ImmortallyYours
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"I just made you up to hurt myself..." ~ Trent Reznor
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Jan 28, 2005 2:25:00 GMT -5
Post by ImmortallyYours on Jan 28, 2005 2:25:00 GMT -5
"Wasted star, Desire was not made an art,..."
Perhaps Art was a nice guy...perhaps, Art was not made a desire, but a man?
Perhaps [being] A made was not a desired art?
Perhaps I just wasted a star?
Aren't all stars wasted, as they die? Aren't all humans wasted, as they die? Aren't all humans stars? (Moby?) Aren't all stars humans?
If energy cannot be created nor destroyed...? What then?
Coffee is spilled, the coffee cup is broken, the mess is absorbed by a towel, or ? Either way, the coffee still exists...is it still coffee, or?
Did it...cease to exist?
The fact that we're here because of Assymetry astounds me...when anti-matter and matter collide, they seperate Assymetrically; i.e. if it were a semetrical seperation, we would've never came to me.
Muah~
The fact that you exist means that this poem came to be...
It has assymetry!
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dayna
Established Muse
I might spend some time downstairs. ~The Incredible String Band~
Posts: 245
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Poet
Jan 28, 2005 7:17:11 GMT -5
Post by dayna on Jan 28, 2005 7:17:11 GMT -5
hahahahaha you always make me laugh! I dig the physics thing, I love the sciences with a passion. Not as much as I love beautiful, assymetrical words!
(Like 'sizzle'.)
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