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Post by palewriter on Feb 4, 2005 13:13:50 GMT -5
Silky smiles enchant in vanilla blossom sunlight Tears of anguish simmer quiet beneath lace Furious white orchid passion became exhaled ashes Soon softness will silently breathe hollow ghosts Blue eyes see the first frigid scars.
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Post by Jessie on Feb 5, 2005 11:18:11 GMT -5
This is beautiful, and I especially like that line. Very good.
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Post by palewriter on Feb 7, 2005 11:57:40 GMT -5
Thanks, Jess. I found this forum to be a very nice exercise, I enjoyed it greatly.
palewriter
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Post by Rose of the Forgotten on Feb 22, 2005 22:50:13 GMT -5
I agree with Jessie, that line was amazing. Overall very nice impression. Good language. -- Jus
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