360rider03
Established Muse
I make stories and live life...
Posts: 311
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Post by 360rider03 on Mar 20, 2005 19:12:35 GMT -5
Come in where I dared to divide a moment, where bare faces' sound screams of lingering anguish cast a single white secret consumed by darkness. where i search my soul for a naked dream in silence, to find nothing more than merely and echo
[this bed of nails ive made for myself a world of hollow passion, scars and death, angels silently drink pleas of deadly tears, follow the blue door to sneak free, sneak free]
choke your fears haunting your city, a cold battle dulls the victory, beneath a liars eye, lies a frigid heart here ive dubbed a thief, seen a saint, danced with the devil, and cried with god you are a ghost within the wind awaiting the breath to taste my soul [] existing beneath the ashes the promise you made, was a waste of your charm moved me back to the beggining begging liberty to grow me strong its evident you desire the stars but no freedom is won, unless you embrace the one who you are
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Post by Breathe *alive* on Mar 30, 2005 11:56:18 GMT -5
I thought this was one of the best Drops I've heard. You did a reallly good job with it, and I'm hoping to see more from you. Nice write. ~Brandi
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Post by dlebrtstrngr on Mar 31, 2005 0:54:01 GMT -5
Hey,
I just read your poem.
It hit me like the dark and heinous monotony of a hell-bound world. "Abondon all hope,all ye who enter here."
(I'm just glad I don't live there.)
Until...
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Post by Rose of the Forgotten on Apr 12, 2005 1:54:42 GMT -5
I like the ending line, I think it makes a very positive statement, though I could be interpreting it wrong. Good job rider! -- Jus
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Post by LaChicaMorada on Apr 17, 2005 18:00:33 GMT -5
Very nice. I like the message in the end.
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