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Post by outlaw138213 on Nov 9, 2005 16:02:07 GMT -5
e mail me with comments at bigred138213@yahoo.com
will you lay with me in a field of stone will you sit with me on a broken throne will you be my strength when im weary and weak will you know my thoughts when i do not speak will you love me still when my hair turns gray will you follow me if i run away will you hide my soul from the angel of death will you stay with me till me very last breath will you stand by me right or wrong will you bring melody to my love song will you go with me to another land will you whipe the blood away from my dying hand will you lay with me if i give myself to you
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Post by outlaw138213 on Nov 9, 2005 16:03:05 GMT -5
good
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Post by lauramaet2007 on Nov 10, 2005 17:40:22 GMT -5
I don't know why but i get a since that you are after someone or something that you aren't quite able to grasp. If i'm wrong let me know but this is just what i get out of your poem. will you stand by me right or wrong will you bring melody to my love song will you go with me to another land will you whipe the blood away from my dying hand I love this part. All in all well written poetry, congrats, and keep the writing up i'd love to see more of your stuff -Laura Mae
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Post by Elf(...drowning in tears...) on Nov 11, 2005 14:11:36 GMT -5
I like the rhymes very much!Keep writting!
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Post by split44 on Dec 17, 2005 0:12:08 GMT -5
this piece flows ever so well with wonderful rhyme very well done. split
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Post by ravenfreebyrd on Dec 17, 2005 11:44:11 GMT -5
Lovely poem...I enjoyed the read. love, Raven
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Post by Coyote on Dec 25, 2005 7:13:55 GMT -5
A nice poem. Good flow and use of words. COYOTE
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xenia
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Post by xenia on Jan 4, 2006 8:09:09 GMT -5
very hormonious full of hope
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Post by ॐ Hemz ॐ on Jan 21, 2006 12:34:16 GMT -5
Delightful! Good use of repetition and smoothly structured rhyming.
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