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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Sept 9, 2007 21:23:03 GMT -5
Summer days that swam Stars, delicate flower scents The beach, a blanket Girls, boys care-free Thinking, I listen, Rain on the window
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Post by bcoyotey on Sept 10, 2007 14:12:29 GMT -5
Jah jah, Stunning imagery of a lovely day. What a great memory to have. This is beautiful, sweetie. Lady B
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anthema
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Post by anthema on Sept 10, 2007 20:17:08 GMT -5
Jahaliel,
A nice little DoP write.
I like the sudden paradigm shift at the end from a hot day at the beach to a rainy day indoors.
Cheers,
Anthema
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Post by - Moirae - on Sept 20, 2007 13:11:29 GMT -5
very nice use of DOP...i enjoyed reading Jahaliel!
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