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Post by lokismischief on Sept 15, 2007 18:15:57 GMT -5
the night smells of rain a naked river of flowing stars
his window changes the trickled images like moments of nostalgia
her scent of flowers his mind flirts silent her voice melts him
outside it pours night blankets him years swim through life nostalgia plagues him
the girl returns a stranger
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Post by salsaqueen85 on Sept 16, 2007 19:38:30 GMT -5
This is so poignent! I like that you have the shorter lines between longer verses
Her scent of flowers his mind flirts silent her voice melts him
I really like " her voice melts him!"
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Post by bcoyotey on Sept 16, 2007 20:14:12 GMT -5
lokismischief, This is sooo pretty. Wonderful Drops poem. Lady B
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Post by lokismischief on Sept 16, 2007 21:49:10 GMT -5
salsaq, Lady B thank you this was the first time i attempted DOP and honestly i spent a good number of hours trying to find the list of words lol but im glad you liked what i came up with.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 8, 2007 1:22:11 GMT -5
this was awesome, great dop. thanks for sharing.
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