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Post by (k) shades of silence on May 21, 2008 21:26:16 GMT -5
I decided while blinded by the mist not to be a captive of it. The opaque white flowing fizz was a shimmering gift.
The mist lit the beauty, polished the stones. Champagne splashing bubbles, wetting the blossoms.
The white dragon was envious of a scented Spring, shining on the poetry of my Sunday sitting.
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Post by ~agold on May 27, 2008 3:54:47 GMT -5
kasting shade- I am really impressed by this piece. Sometimes it can be a struggle to pull off cohesive meaning and flow in drops- but you really blew this out of the water for me! Amazing amazing AMAZING!
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on May 27, 2008 19:32:10 GMT -5
this was so good, i loved the imagery you created here. awesome work.
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Post by ¤ Maeka Amanite ¤ (WD) on May 28, 2008 21:28:54 GMT -5
Wow this was amazing. And to think you had to pick words available to you. This piece was just wow...love it.
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Post by (k) shades of silence on Jun 28, 2008 0:04:33 GMT -5
Thanks for the comments. Agold - It was a struggle, but I enjoyed it. Thank you. Jahaliel - Thanks, I was going for the imagery here. White Demon - I am flattered by the praise from such an amazing poetess.
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Post by €ereza|£inze on Jun 29, 2008 3:44:45 GMT -5
I don't know about everyone else, but I detected a subtle second meaning behind this poem... Maybe I'm just bad. Either way, imagery is key. And your talent shines through. Continuing to read your poems...
Exalting you.
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Post by tsu on Jun 29, 2008 15:51:19 GMT -5
dont know how i missed this before..love the white dragon reference (of course!) but the whole image is utterly enchanting!..
"champagne splashing bubbles, wetting the blossoms"
was my favourite bit!! ;D
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Post by iab on Jul 12, 2008 16:50:22 GMT -5
I don't know about everyone else, but I detected a subtle second meaning behind this poem... Maybe I'm just bad. Either way, imagery is key. And your talent shines through. Continuing to read your poems...
Exalting you.
Me too. Perhaps we are both bad. ( I am, of course!) Well done, either way, KS. Love to read you, Bro!
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Post by matw63 on Jul 24, 2008 14:50:09 GMT -5
terrific drop mate. enjoyed it
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