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Post by lifeart on Jun 27, 2006 14:51:49 GMT -5
Wait, nevermind, after rereading it, I totally understand it, I was jsut reading it wrong!! Goodjob!
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Post by lifeart on Jun 27, 2006 14:51:09 GMT -5
I like the first 4 lines and the last line, but the other two, kind of confuse me....godo job anyway though!
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Post by lifeart on Jul 22, 2006 16:16:07 GMT -5
hmm simply beautiful. I love both stanzas equally!
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Post by lifeart on Oct 5, 2006 21:48:29 GMT -5
A snow white rose Over ashes and stones
really powerful first words.
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Post by lifeart on Jul 24, 2006 11:12:59 GMT -5
very nice. well written and good message.
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Post by lifeart on Jul 10, 2006 13:48:40 GMT -5
I like the way you worded some of this, and didn't like the way you worded other parts, but overall I like the message of the story. I like the last line. Welcome to TPS! Keep posting!
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Post by lifeart on Jul 24, 2006 11:15:06 GMT -5
actually that does make it a bit clearer thanks!
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Post by lifeart on Jul 23, 2006 13:43:28 GMT -5
I agree with whisper it is a little bit odd, but I still love it also! Good job!
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Post by lifeart on Jul 26, 2006 13:35:22 GMT -5
so beautiful!
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Post by lifeart on Jul 10, 2006 13:51:06 GMT -5
Good imagery, I love the second stanza!
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Post by lifeart on Jul 25, 2006 14:05:00 GMT -5
great imagery! great choice of words and beautiful poem!
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