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Post by asher02 on Sept 10, 2009 18:08:12 GMT -5
I like how the stanza becomes a more cohesive thought with that last bold and caps word. Interesting style.
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Post by asher02 on Sept 10, 2009 17:58:24 GMT -5
Great Poem. I especially like the last two lines.
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Post by asher02 on Sept 10, 2009 17:53:17 GMT -5
Brilliant. Put together very well. I love the line "Compresses desires and dodges regret"
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Post by asher02 on Sept 10, 2009 17:39:37 GMT -5
Concealed desire skips regret Approaching logical substitute Vulnerable dispute discourages promising outlook Dreaded bubble beneath explodes Obscure inertia indulges me Then made it boil Hypothetically declared
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Post by asher02 on Jan 10, 2008 15:47:29 GMT -5
Decision
The woods moods Knew captive thought Shimmering blind snow observe fallen pine
Goodbye charming summer Silver slick ice Be my choice
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