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Post by Sir Daniel on Dec 11, 2011 17:00:19 GMT -5
having attempted this list of words myself, I can feel the restrictions you had to work with and I know how they force us to guide our poem into waters we may not have expected to be in, however you did an amazing job of making this happen and in a way your reader can understand.
enjoyed much, take care
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Nov 7, 2011 6:17:53 GMT -5
one of the best things about drops poems is because of the limited word choice, we wind up writing such imaginary stanzas that even following along is like suspending reality. Really enjoyed, take care.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 15, 2011 19:02:48 GMT -5
S H E W A L K S I N S I D E W A T E R[/font]
She walks inside water The world is open problems surface Why is the lion under the floor?
White skin, black suit Silent maids barking Shining shoes Quickly, open the front door..
Lead the children Lift the pail Walk where stars evaporate March back to the sea
Loosening pocketbooks Over fictional surfaces The dove swims to the surface Why won't she?
© 2011
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Post by Sir Daniel on Aug 27, 2011 21:07:14 GMT -5
you painted a background and your reader can easily imagine the story inside it.. the life these two led, the wealth they have and their children.. sad poem yet wonderful when you remember the fact your words were limited to the drops words.
take care,
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Aug 20, 2011 18:12:26 GMT -5
very interesting list of words this month and you were able to pull out from them this lovely poem. I am sure that like most poetry, there are many meanings but when I read it I thought about how you dive in water and while your underwater you are in another world.. your priorities change, breathing becomes the most important yet the lack of gravity gives you freedom you won't find anywhere else.. then you come back up out of water and into the same world you left.
really enjoyed, take care.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jun 18, 2011 17:28:46 GMT -5
love that first line, we do have to take off those things that stress us if we want to relax.. work will always be waiting on us. Much enjoyed, take care.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Dec 21, 2010 6:35:59 GMT -5
lots on imagery in only a few lines.. it does seem so often that life is this way, doesn't it..
take care.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jan 8, 2010 16:17:14 GMT -5
hi Arty,
our flag represents us as a nation, both good and bad. sometimes our government does bad, creates situations we don't want to be part of, and they hold the flag in front of them as if it gives them permission to do anything they want.
it is up to us as people to live with our actions, regardless of who tells us to do it. We must always keep our belief true and close to our hearts, in family, in love.
that this is a drop poem is amazing, you say so much that it seems as there is no limitation. I really enjoyed, take care my friend.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Dec 16, 2009 7:15:59 GMT -5
whoever said "words will never hurt me" was obviously not a writer.. I enjoyed your haiku because it stands true so well too the way we defend ourselves..
take care,
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Nov 23, 2009 6:32:35 GMT -5
Hi Arty my friend.
I believe you have hit the whole idea behind Thanksgiving right on the head. For many families, the Holidays are the only time all year long everyone is in the same house and for at least one day, everyone tries to get along and forget past differences.
Enjoyed your read, I have gotten the feeling over the years I've known you here at TPS that you value your family highly.
take care,
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Sept 27, 2009 16:35:37 GMT -5
loved the ending, it looks as if you had alot of fun with the drops machine.. I liked the fact you put so many words together by first letter as when I do a drops poem I must sort them out the same way too..
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Aug 31, 2009 8:16:28 GMT -5
all addictive drugs promise regret the next morning, but for the night, they promise a virtual escape from your worries and perhaps even offer the fake hope that you will be better if you take them.
lies.. all lies..
enjoyed the drops, personally I'm glad I was never weak to fall into the grasp of heroin. I feel for those who have..
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Aug 28, 2009 2:25:42 GMT -5
something tells me this boat is about to sink..
very nice haiku, and from the drops words no less.. I love the second line as the heavens truly are black when there is no hope.
tc,
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on May 28, 2009 15:22:34 GMT -5
I'm still getting my mind around the idea of roping the pope, hey, it sounds pretty fun but I don't think the Vatican would go for it but what the heck,
great job JJF, this is a doozy!
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Feb 18, 2009 15:45:01 GMT -5
last week when I looked at this selection of drops words I said "heck no, there is no way I could ever make anything of value from them.." and here you did just what I couldn't.
Congrats on a wonderful drop poem, an achievement if I ever read one.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Feb 18, 2009 15:42:56 GMT -5
golly gee, I believe you also have summited a haiku with this if my understanding of 5-7-5 is true..
All of us writers hope to achieve that top prize, or at least someone to say "good job",
which is what I must say with this.
enjoyed!
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Feb 18, 2009 15:40:04 GMT -5
Having spent an hour yesterday with these words, I can really appreciate the wonderful result you have here.
Love the title..
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Feb 17, 2009 15:36:02 GMT -5
I D E O L O G Y An electric Pope Adviser to the faithful Spins socialism past philosophers Profit before propaganda Representing the oppressed then concluding each excess as if he were his own opponent. Newspapers regard him as an author The Mayor introduces him to his underground home Me? When a writer advises the public, he is hopeful they suspect the article may be censored. I conclude by offering hope he manages to knock his greedy excesses before they multiply.. (c)'o9 "drops of poetry"
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jan 16, 2009 19:41:25 GMT -5
As to the dropping of leaves transform the summer ground into a winter paradise, so does the dropping of words onto your talented pen. This holds true with nature and shows us that Autumn represents change both outside the window and inside our lives.
Great job working with the restrictions of the drops.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 24, 2008 1:15:12 GMT -5
I tried these words and wound up with nothing near this good. I am amazed you wrote this. Great job!
Daniel
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