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Post by Sir Daniel on Sept 12, 2008 23:35:30 GMT -5
Hey Mat, this is very good, I enjoyed the ending. A tree with no water will surely die.
I've felt this way before, I hope never to again.
Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jul 23, 2008 23:41:47 GMT -5
I don't remember ever reading the words God and the Tax Man in the same sentence before, what an interesting concept..
brilliant!
Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jul 20, 2008 21:03:41 GMT -5
yours was the drop poem I read before I wrote mine, just to give me an idea if something could be done with these words. Thank you for the inspiration.
I loved the intro. into this, the first two lines seem soo true 5 days a week..
great job, take care.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jul 19, 2008 17:24:00 GMT -5
When I first heard your plans to write a palindrome using only the words supplied by the poetry drops part of this site, I thought "no way, it can not be done".. Just writing a regular poem using those 50 or so words only is a challenge by itself, then figuring out how to write a poem so it reads both forward and backward, well.. I know from my own experience palindrome's are written one word at a time and you don't start at the top and work your way down, you have to start in the middle.. And then to see you combine these two worthy challenges into one..
gosh, I don't think anyone here could have been successful with such restrictions.. yet here you go and post this...
you simply amazed me. your poem defies logic, it should not be possible, yet it exists. you have made a believer out of me.
consider yourself exalted and treat yourself to some double chocolate peanut-butter palindrome poetry cup cakes (they have icing on both sides..)
wow..
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jul 14, 2008 21:15:58 GMT -5
The Glass Fighter
I was a traveler, drawn by the blissful courtship of Elizabeth
I began as a friend, a Protestant bystander, intending to toast a relationship that won't conceive, when a century of my lifework was unjustly corrupted overnight by the brother of my mid-wife, a sheepish librarian.
I was dragged into the garden, I remain impatient as the outcome of his charges begin to be enforced in my mind. My body weakening to the occasion, ordinary nights remain in doubt, as a clock stops.
I remain with my religion, A glass fighter beginning his dramatic end. (c)'o8
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jul 12, 2008 19:05:47 GMT -5
The power of love. It can move mountains and change the routes of rivers.
Those are the feelings we all should enjoy at least once in our lives. You have said only a few words, but you said them well.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jul 12, 2008 18:59:08 GMT -5
cool, passionate and even with limited words, you manage to create a whirlpool of emotions.
I enjoyed this, I'm off to read the others.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Jun 18, 2008 22:36:57 GMT -5
For the first four lines being sad, I wound up with a smile at the end.
Grandma's did have a way of making us feel better, for me it usually involved home made cookies..
enjoyed,
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Mar 24, 2008 7:05:34 GMT -5
Ooh, the mood you have captured is so sad yet so real for so many couples who are still together "for the kids sake". I simply love the 1936 Sundays, how many years would that make? almost 40.. way too long to be unhappy.
You have given us a poem that would have gotten attention in any forum it was posted in, because it is so easily identifiable. And to think it was restricted by the drops..
wonderful job, Lady B, kudo's on an amazing entry.
~ Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 26, 2007 18:37:26 GMT -5
Great job, you have created what we will call "haiku drops".. And to do two of them... I wonder, my friend.. are you showing off?? (LOL)
You might have started the latest trend..
Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 25, 2007 16:48:28 GMT -5
Lady B, wow, that was anything but cliche too me, I read a story that connected the opening where you see a relationship that went wrong to the end where he becomes a silent stranger. And this is a drops poem? this is amazing, it must have taken you hours. As some ole Chinese fella would say in a 1970's tv show Kung-Fu: "you have done well, grasshopper, you are now ready to take on the world." With that I think I'll end my comment... Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 21, 2007 16:01:33 GMT -5
Bravo my friend, you have taken those scattered drops and made something of value. I didn't even originally attempt to see this as a haiku but now that it has been pointed out I find that it is twice as good as I originally thought.
Well done.
Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 19, 2007 1:05:07 GMT -5
I don't know that I understand every line but I do know that I like it. I know how hard these things are and I commend you for a great job well done.
I really like the ending.
Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 16, 2007 20:31:06 GMT -5
Thank you my friend,
again, you leave me without the right words. I am so glad you found the Sanctuary for you truly have en-riched many lives.
Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 15, 2007 13:54:26 GMT -5
Thank you Astarael, So I have noticed that you have done a couple of these "Drops of Poetry" too, is there a method you used?
I had to take all the words and put them together by letter (all the a's together, all the b's, etc.) before I could do it. That way it wasn't so hard to locate a word I could use to continue the sentence. This is my 3rd attempt at doing one of these and the first that I didn't accidentally erase trying to save. I like the fact that the words were all together in sentences this time as compared to strung out over the entire box, that made it easier to put them in alphabetical order, but there was still one word that I could not get my cursor to move..
Thanks for the kind words. We are all lucky to have each other here, I doubt if there is a more talented poetry site on the Internet than here at the sanctuary.
Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 14, 2007 18:21:08 GMT -5
Coming from someone who's talents I envy, I am honored you wrote such words. Thank you.
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 14, 2007 2:39:24 GMT -5
thanks you young clapping hippie (yea, I read your note to Zimo..)
This was a tough write without cheating (using words that were not there or using a word listed more than once) but I did it. Sorry it doesn't flow better but that is a result of the limitations.
I like the title as well, I think I really could have done something cool with a title like that had I been free to use any word I like but that isn't the idea with "drops of poetry".
Scott would have been lost with this, his verse's are imaginary, not chosen. Maybe someday he will have the time to come over here and check this site out and prove me wrong.
Thanks for the reply.
Daniel
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 13, 2007 20:40:40 GMT -5
Stars Melt
Although stars melt like a moment gone, why did the plague take her?
Dare imagine a flower without life collecting rain returned for the river.
Frost composed poetry yet it was Mr. Kipling's that changed reason.
25 years, listening to his silent voice, flowing compassion, it had nostalgia!
Still, days that could seem care-free before, turn terrible.
Spent summer away, driving down last night, outside the hotel, Beach Boy's strum guitar on corner.
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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 24, 2007 9:43:48 GMT -5
wonderfully done, having used the same set of words myself I know how hard this was to write.
Daniel
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