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Snow
Feb 1, 2010 20:10:52 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Feb 1, 2010 20:10:52 GMT -5
A very beautiful drops, I loved it all, excellent work
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 29, 2009 5:46:49 GMT -5
He sings, Musician made whole Strategy dodges blackmail Heaven skips, promising dayime Dawn heralds a spiritual call Vulnerable chord Swamps logic and ideology Each migrates as He sings (based on the character Arithon from Janny Wurts' series The Wars of Light and Shadow, Book 5 - Stormed Fortress. Work is original dop )
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 29, 2009 5:43:23 GMT -5
i really enjoyed this, so very beautiful with good imagery and a lovely sense of flow. Great work.
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Indulge
Jul 29, 2009 5:42:05 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 29, 2009 5:42:05 GMT -5
i thought the second stanza in this was really good, welcome to TPS (kind of belated I know )
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 29, 2009 5:36:20 GMT -5
you convey the despair of darkness, wishing for sight that was lost, i felt this in my heart, it leaped off the page at me. I hope to see more of your work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 29, 2009 5:30:46 GMT -5
wow, that's really impressive, congratulats on constructing a very successful dop'ku (a drops of poetry haiku )
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Feb 17, 2009 18:16:34 GMT -5
wow this was amazing. Congratulations on a magnificent drop!
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 20, 2008 22:17:50 GMT -5
I really liked this, you made it effortless. Beautiful and interesting wording. much enjoyed.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 20, 2008 22:16:12 GMT -5
i really liked this, it was vivid and really well constructed. Loved the last two lines.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 20, 2008 22:15:09 GMT -5
wow that's one awesome drops you have written there I loved the line: "Autumn algebra: when Autumn orange, Autumn brown." fantastic work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 8, 2008 0:43:26 GMT -5
How is it that tenderness wilts to vexation?
Highlights of exhilaration tossed down Autumn leaves falling Sunflower ambience twists to orange death
Lift me, Then hate me, Reduce me to A brown rainbow...
Fuzzy
Complex
Doomed
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yo
Oct 8, 2008 0:41:36 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 8, 2008 0:41:36 GMT -5
simple but powerful little drops piece. I think there many people who need to hear the heart of this.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 31, 2008 20:41:18 GMT -5
wow, this was amazing matt. a well placed warning. great work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 31, 2008 20:38:28 GMT -5
simple but beautiful, i agree with tsu that line (rotating kisses frame delight) was just lovely.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Aug 31, 2008 20:34:05 GMT -5
i liked this piece, pity about the formatting simple and effective, i enjoyed the read.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 30, 2008 19:08:46 GMT -5
I have been unjust, impatient Doubt descends on my mind Sorry begins Nights are for waterfalls Watermarked cheeks the outcome
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 30, 2008 19:07:53 GMT -5
simple but really effective. great work.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 30, 2008 19:05:51 GMT -5
The image of yourself as a bystander to your own life was really unique and cool. Good questioning tone. Much enjoyed.
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pisces
Jul 30, 2008 19:04:37 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 30, 2008 19:04:37 GMT -5
I really liked this. It was clever, beautifully presented and had a great depth to it.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 30, 2008 19:03:35 GMT -5
i agree with Lady B, you're getting really good at these. loved the alliteration.
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