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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 18, 2009 18:31:16 GMT -5
Thanks, Daniel. I strayed from the list on a couple counts, but hung with it a long time. Appreciate your appreciation. Best, molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 18, 2009 4:07:03 GMT -5
Thanks, Bobswife. I cheated on this one... changed upright to uptight and inserted a couple out of the corral words but the word group is so much fun to wrestle with. molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 18, 2009 4:03:27 GMT -5
Thanks so much, bobswife....glad it was relate-able. m
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 17, 2009 18:51:01 GMT -5
Exalt, Sir Pope Daniel. Elegantly done. Loved the "me" line especially. A serene kind of cynicism you bring, along with a great pic. best, molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 17, 2009 15:24:34 GMT -5
Adjusted (removed "now" from last line):
Lost to a New York Minute ...
Warm advance from sane, subway-riding chap. I uptight. Our laughter's song gone.
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 17, 2009 6:26:10 GMT -5
Warm advance from sane, subway-riding chap. I uptight. Our laughter's song now gone.
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 17, 2009 5:03:11 GMT -5
icyminx,
My thoughts on the World [great bold beginning! bravo]
Readied, relegated revelry; [relegated revelry.. interesting oxymoron] Untruthfully, such is, the inspiring burgundy Sun, [like the color] fumigating the vestiges of melancholic annihilation.
Thence,
To have my mind sweep through the plains [very potent image.. excellent] and sleep among the nymphs, [interesting and positive] and the blessed cranes, [blessed gives us hope]
will not save me from the bleeding star of [oh dear... back to dangerous now... BRAVO!!!!!] Now. [so nice this has its own line]
best, molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 17, 2009 4:57:20 GMT -5
jah!
[such a bold title.. nice]
I have been unjust, impatient [very assertive] Doubt descends on my mind Sorry begins [love the wording] Nights are for waterfalls [love this metaphor] Watermarked cheeks the outcome [nice and tight and rich... great job!]
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 17, 2009 4:49:55 GMT -5
great job.. nice and fluid and active.. and the ending is a great payoff with its rhythm and rhyme! bravo! molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 14, 2009 23:38:38 GMT -5
Lady B, so grateful for your warm and quick-timed validation here! molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 14, 2009 19:04:21 GMT -5
[this is lovely, mila] Clouds rewind backwards [how interesting] Sweeping in the twist of rain Autumn’s ambience. [nicely put] As it were spreading forgotten pain. [as "if"?] [just love the expression "forgotten pain"] My homeland trespasses through [how interesting that your homeland trespasses .. such irony, droll and subtle] Fuzzy memories [nice adjective] Remembering the day I didn’t know I ll be leaving forever. [poignant] Nevertheless [nice transition spacing and word] Rainbow bounces off of clouds. Wilted with the nurtured smile.
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Choices
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 14, 2009 18:59:35 GMT -5
Strong and down to earth, Mat. excellent. molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 14, 2009 18:43:30 GMT -5
Obscure writer quests hopeful at paper-ridden desk top, prized venture.
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 14, 2009 15:48:50 GMT -5
thanks, thor. much appreciated. m
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 14, 2009 15:47:37 GMT -5
Thorashell... hippy-born inactivist? what a fun and interesting phrasing ... does that mean you are child of hippy ... or were a hippy ... more hippy than activist... hard to be an inactivist in the age of Bushism though I wish I had ramped it up long ago and would be even more intense today. appreciate your encouragement. thanks molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 13, 2009 2:09:46 GMT -5
wow... such graphic action and intrigue ... and last two words, "it dies" ... you pack a lot in those lines for sure. well done! molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 13, 2009 2:06:54 GMT -5
thanks eboni and mat ... this is a great word corral for creativity. nice to get the warm validation, too. m
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 5, 2009 14:32:56 GMT -5
Stacy,
Our posts crossed. Break down away on my stuff. i love to hear what my words evoke ... it is a gift that instructs and expands me. thanks. m
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 5, 2009 14:29:38 GMT -5
stacy, what a treat! some positive karma my spirit sorely needs. it was a challenge to pack in so much frustration in only 17 syllables.... was willing to drop the -ing from crawl to enhance my contempt. thanks so much for appreciating! will be back soon. best, molly
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 3, 2009 19:51:29 GMT -5
Lady B, The colossal con of the sociopathic bottom feeders needs to be acknowledged ... we as society deserve and need catharsis. Narcissism is awesomely awful! Thanks for the validation. molly
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