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Post by (Amaranthine) on Dec 22, 2004 17:18:44 GMT -5
I like the last line, great write Acoustic.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Dec 22, 2004 17:12:49 GMT -5
I like it, very nice.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Dec 22, 2004 17:17:16 GMT -5
I like it Daisie, the feeling of panic or fear is shown in the poem. The only thing I was slightly confused about is in the 1st line "Groom"- did you mean "gloom"? Cause groom reminds me of the wedding kind...which doesn't make sense...
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Dec 22, 2004 17:14:43 GMT -5
This is pretty good, I like it.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Dec 12, 2004 18:18:13 GMT -5
I like it, it's interesting.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Dec 12, 2004 18:11:47 GMT -5
Nice write. I like the word choice, creates in interesting image
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Dec 12, 2004 18:10:02 GMT -5
Short, but good. "saw His diamond glory" made me laugh, I don't know what you are talking about exactly but with passion in the title I couldn't help thinking of...well you know.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Dec 12, 2004 18:04:21 GMT -5
Nice little poem, TheGone. I liked it.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Dec 12, 2004 18:00:37 GMT -5
Interesting, nice write. I liked: That was a cool line
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Nov 14, 2004 1:07:17 GMT -5
Nice write. The only thing I noticed was "remanence or"- Remanence is not a word, I assumed you meant "remnants" and so I read the last line as: - which makes more sense.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Nov 14, 2004 1:15:52 GMT -5
That was really nice. Great job .
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Nov 6, 2004 17:50:56 GMT -5
Great poem, Waterlily- I really like the ending, perfect choice
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Nov 14, 2004 1:12:41 GMT -5
Nice poem, I like it. Only thing I'd suggest is puncuation-like: "deaths embrace : awful frigid and hollow" or something like that. It helps with the meaning and flow.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Nov 14, 2004 1:09:33 GMT -5
I agree. It's simple but nice.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Oct 25, 2004 20:18:39 GMT -5
This is really good, great job at the Drops of Poetry; I like your imagery and the format And welcome to TPS ;D
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Oct 25, 2004 20:28:33 GMT -5
Interesting, I like how it seems like a chopped up poem...condenses the meaning.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Oct 17, 2004 1:22:54 GMT -5
Nice poem Fionnachtain, I like the beginning
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Oct 3, 2004 18:34:03 GMT -5
I like it, the first two lines are cool
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Sept 18, 2004 0:50:13 GMT -5
That was good, I like the twist on the words. Great descriptions and everything.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Sept 15, 2004 4:02:24 GMT -5
Wow, that was great! Amazing how random words can create amazing poems. I love the wording and symbolism. Very nice, I love it ;D
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