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Post by thepoettree on Nov 24, 2011 2:56:18 GMT -5
Today A Flounder
Today Over a world’s problems The governess read to the children
The silent lion smelled a boy A boy swimming past He sprinted
The Newfoundland The family Newfoundland The enormous family Newfoundland Bared large white teeth
The lion shrugged To the lawn returned He won’t skin a boy today Today, a flounder is good
Today Over a world’s problems One boy returned
By A. Arvensis
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Nov 24, 2011 3:47:30 GMT -5
Interesting drops, welcome to TPS. I really liked the way this flowed, the story of it. Nice work.
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Post by ~k~(tornadoes) on Dec 1, 2011 4:43:32 GMT -5
Very interesting bit of writing. I like
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Post by ladylilith ~stalwart~ on Dec 30, 2011 12:25:22 GMT -5
I love how the story explodes and then reels itself back in. What an intriguing tale you tell with such a difficult cage to be confined in! You picked out my favourite word of that set 'flounder'.. It's just so useful and effective! Great Drops here, it was a pleasure to read.
Lily^^
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