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Post by Mila~ on Dec 2, 2008 1:57:06 GMT -5
Clouds rewind backwards Sweeping in the twist of rain Autumn’s ambience. As it were spreading forgotten pain.
My homeland trespasses through Fuzzy memories
Remembering the day I didn’t know I ll be leaving forever.
Nevertheless
Rainbow bounces off of clouds. Wilted with the nurtured smile.
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Post by Created2Write on Dec 3, 2008 15:55:01 GMT -5
Mila, this was simply gorgeous, exalt! Peace, C2W
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Post by bcoyotey on Dec 3, 2008 18:01:00 GMT -5
I agree. Simply beautiful writing Mila. (Ive missed you gal) Made me sigh and feel wistful. Kudos! Lady B
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Post by kemoksy on Dec 19, 2008 23:33:05 GMT -5
wow, kinda made me sad to read, but gets a little more cheery at the end... =)
usually these drops of poetry don't evoke any real feelings from me, but yours was really good and kinda hit home, thanks for writing
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 14, 2009 19:04:21 GMT -5
[this is lovely, mila] Clouds rewind backwards [how interesting] Sweeping in the twist of rain Autumn’s ambience. [nicely put] As it were spreading forgotten pain. [as "if"?] [just love the expression "forgotten pain"] My homeland trespasses through [how interesting that your homeland trespasses .. such irony, droll and subtle] Fuzzy memories [nice adjective] Remembering the day I didn’t know I ll be leaving forever. [poignant] Nevertheless [nice transition spacing and word] Rainbow bounces off of clouds. Wilted with the nurtured smile.
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