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Post by thorashell on Feb 14, 2009 11:57:32 GMT -5
Below the surface Underneath the underground Dies faithful socialism. Oppressed advances multiply Obscure opponents ridden. Hopeful public writer Suspects he moderates, Taxpayer when regarding Their representative waits. My propaganda fighter Philosopher to Pope An adequate successor Attending every rope. Author knocks adviser Newspaper censors' snow Concluded flesh expires Regarding profit lows.[/center]
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Post by bcoyotey on Feb 14, 2009 20:27:14 GMT -5
Thor, I am much impressed with this well thought out, intelligent Drops piece. Great use of metaphors, good flow, intriguing possible interpretations. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Lady B BTW, Welcome to The Poet Sanctuary.
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Post by thorashell on Feb 15, 2009 10:02:57 GMT -5
High praise from one so obviously talented. I wasn't sure whether you would find the rhyming scheme too cutesy. This is my first original piece in almost two decades and i must admit, I was a bit intimidated in light of your own work. Thank you for taking the time to review it for me:)
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Post by unsinkmolly on Feb 17, 2009 4:49:55 GMT -5
great job.. nice and fluid and active.. and the ending is a great payoff with its rhythm and rhyme! bravo! molly
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