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Post by dollarbean on Mar 9, 2009 21:51:59 GMT -5
i planned on fleshing this out more but my tv shows are coming on!
i was gonna do villanelle but i got completely confused, hope ya enjoy!
beneath the chesnut heaps' low fighter pope migrates beneath chestnut heaps' low, axes, knocks, tosses underground chapped-- 'underground Chap' rages, warms snow,
Pope spins song: "Mayor censors public snow!" "Propoganda!" mayor groans; hope- ful taxpayers gasp upright orientating "how?"
mayor ventures beneath chesnut heaps' low, begs regarding snow, snow multiplies, opp- onent 'underground Chap' profits votes. oh! how
philosopher suspects mayor's representative snow! yet no author authors what philosopher develops, for now subway obscures underneath chesnut heaps'low
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Post by bcoyotey on Mar 11, 2009 15:06:51 GMT -5
Wow Dollarbean. This is a very expansive Drops. It has a difference cadence than most poems. Very imaginative work. Lady B
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Post by bobswife4ever (surgery soon) on Mar 11, 2009 18:17:34 GMT -5
I really loved the creative approach you took with this one. The thing that really fascinated me the most was how you let one word in the second line flow into the first word of line three. Haven't seen that very much, but was most intrigued by it. The following was my favorite: I am most eager to read more from you. You have a certain style that you don't see very often and it is most refreshing. Happy posting... Stacy
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Post by unsinkmolly on Mar 28, 2009 20:06:12 GMT -5
db-great dialogue, action, and spirit. BRAVO! molly
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