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Post by dustili on Jun 2, 2009 21:20:15 GMT -5
I have always wanted to try this D.O.P. so here it goes. I tried to see how many of the words I could incorporate into this prose. Let me know if I did this right please. Thank you. She migrated over to her partner promising to drive his desire to the edge of heaven above. and declared she would be his teacher not a substitute, not a beginner, but his teacher. As the soft rock plays on the stereo she sings and sways, and in a split second he feels her approaching leaning in for a kiss and his heart skips a beat as his focus is locked in her method of movements. As he lies beneath her his desire explodes like tiny bubbles floating, wet and warm. He swears she copied from an obscure spiritual amateur, but she was no amateur. She was the prominent teacher that taught him to feel the opposite affects of never knowing such indulges of sex and desire. He couldn't dispute sticking to the logical and hypothetical context of simple pleasures no longer. He kept going back to the physics of this well rounded sexual encounter which stretches way back beyond his belief's of spiritual sexuality. Now the beginner student had concealed his regret, after approaching a new strategy, to nickname himself.... The Teacher.
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Post by bcoyotey on Jun 17, 2009 14:56:01 GMT -5
dusti, You not only have produced your first Drops, you have done a marvelous job. The flow is amazing and I enjoyed the storytelling aspect. You did use only the words from the Drops menu, didn't you? I haven't checked them in a while. Anyway, good writing. Lady B
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Post by dustili on Jun 20, 2009 0:15:02 GMT -5
Thank you. I wanted to try something new and wasn't sure it would work. I like doing this, thank you again..
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Post by bobswife4ever (surgery soon) on Jun 20, 2009 15:00:57 GMT -5
Yeah I'm a bit rusty on the drops words myself and should go and check them out, but this is one of the most interesting and unique drops that I have ever read. This is truly incredible. The prose format really set this one over the top for me, and I'm not a really big fan of prose poetry. But I loved this. Can't wait to read more from you throughout the boards here at TPS.
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chizl
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Post by chizl on Sept 8, 2009 0:01:10 GMT -5
I was truly amazed. One of the best drops I've read. I cant believe it was your first. Wonderful flow and story. *EXALT*
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Post by Donta' Mason= Mazbaby(in&out) on Nov 9, 2009 12:18:28 GMT -5
very good indeed each word hand picked, and placed well to tell a lovely poem
thank you for that
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