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Jun 30, 2009 21:16:31 GMT -5
Post by untitled on Jun 30, 2009 21:16:31 GMT -5
heroin discusses desire beneath bone.
promising heaven she blackmails the vulnerable
then compresses another dreaded regret.
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Post by bobswife4ever (surgery soon) on Jul 2, 2009 7:04:17 GMT -5
The ending sent chills up my spine, but in the most awesome way. I loved this. Excellent drops poem, mf. Keep them coming.
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chizl
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Jul 3, 2009 18:47:16 GMT -5
Post by chizl on Jul 3, 2009 18:47:16 GMT -5
promising heaven she blackmails the vulnerable.............really like this line...trying to quash the fears inside yourself...addiction takes over and makes it easy...bravo
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Jul 29, 2009 5:42:05 GMT -5
Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 29, 2009 5:42:05 GMT -5
i thought the second stanza in this was really good, welcome to TPS (kind of belated I know )
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Jul 29, 2009 21:23:04 GMT -5
Post by ElijahsGreyPanthers on Jul 29, 2009 21:23:04 GMT -5
Love the description you managed in so few words. The second stanza was definitely my favorite, though.
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Nov 9, 2009 12:22:44 GMT -5
Post by Donta' Mason= Mazbaby(in&out) on Nov 9, 2009 12:22:44 GMT -5
short and deep wording you grasp was very nice
the effluence is sobering & smooth as well
nice thinking skills my friend
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twihardangel
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Alternative is Inoxticating
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Nov 13, 2009 10:14:08 GMT -5
Post by twihardangel on Nov 13, 2009 10:14:08 GMT -5
I agree with Mazbaby. Short yet deep. Have to say that the First stanza is my favorite. I wrote a short poem using D.O.P as well, it was a little longer than this and i couldnt do it in as few words as you. Great write.
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Memory
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Time and Space, Mortality and Meaning, My Pen transcends
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Nov 13, 2009 12:53:24 GMT -5
Post by Memory on Nov 13, 2009 12:53:24 GMT -5
Great work on addiction, I agree with Twihard and Mazbaby, amazingly deep in so few words. Well written and Welcome to TPS.
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