zoocq
New Member
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Post by zoocq on Sept 7, 2009 9:35:58 GMT -5
Mark me! Heaven skips above rotted swamps stretching vulnerable, obscuring each dawn it's desired chord. Heroin bone splitting, blackened regret, rockets exploding, dodging the edge promising to focus in spiritual context when indulges spike next. A discouraging outlook stretching beneath driving seas faking patience, dreaded inertia declared after logical methods clipped. Approaching daytime conceals another black pocket; my exploding regret.
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Post by bcoyotey on Sept 7, 2009 12:52:34 GMT -5
Marvelous writing zoocq. It has a huge impact on the reader and I forgot it was a drops poem. Welcome to TPS. Glad you're here. Lady B PS. Please remember to respond to 3 poems by other poets for every 1 that you post. We are an interactive community.
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chizl
Wandering Muse
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Post by chizl on Sept 7, 2009 23:52:06 GMT -5
Very stirring...Welcome to TPS =)
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Post by asher02 on Sept 10, 2009 17:58:24 GMT -5
Great Poem. I especially like the last two lines.
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Post by needleme on Oct 1, 2009 11:29:55 GMT -5
Great job on such a constrained write! I found it rather challenging doing this exercise myself, but it was still fun. Good work!
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