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Post by marise on Apr 23, 2010 0:22:08 GMT -5
hope revised to pocketed doubt memory art the signature stamp emerging muscle steered down to the center vessel circled in frequented void
e n v e l o p e d
the confidential script me, the constant faithful to the playground heresy
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Post by Ne Vile Velis on Apr 23, 2010 13:54:13 GMT -5
I like the format of this piece, I'd like to hear what the etended meaning was to see if I deceifered it the same way
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Post by unsinkmolly on Apr 25, 2010 21:35:24 GMT -5
hope revised to pocketed doubt... how wonderful.....frequented void... great... love the sensibility marise. m
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Post by needleme on May 7, 2010 8:51:35 GMT -5
It's amazing how depth can come out of limited wording. This piece was excellent!
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Post by girlwiththepearls on Sept 24, 2010 17:18:53 GMT -5
I like the staccato minimalism of this piece--as others have pointed out, the first line is lovely and very vivid. You do well to play around with the construction--I think it works with the diction quite nicely. Well done.
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Post by Gurl23 on Sept 28, 2010 11:14:01 GMT -5
I like this too, and I'd like to know the intended meaning behind it too!
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Post by bcoyotey on Oct 4, 2010 22:02:10 GMT -5
Bam! An amazing piece BB. The impact is hard hitting and leaves no holds barred. This would hold true in any genre. The fact that is a Drops just adds to the power of your talent. And the vertical *enveloped?* Yes, I know. Bookmarking. Exalt. *hug*
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Post by leiloni on Oct 24, 2010 18:09:51 GMT -5
Wow! So few words and yet so much said. Very well done, Marise!!
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Post by Scarltt32 on Oct 25, 2010 22:27:31 GMT -5
I love the depth of the piece, you have taken the challenge of drops and created a work of art- Nicely done! I love the first line as well, brilliant!
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Post by windowflower on Jan 2, 2011 21:48:39 GMT -5
exalt
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