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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 4, 2010 19:42:36 GMT -5
Choosing constant horror, My eccentricity warrants a specialist Confidential procedure, a circle Next examiner, next examiner...
She speaks "It is over"
Preview the void, air whistles in doubt Hope is revised, can't listen
Raging
Then my memory explodes Alien vessel
It is raining
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Post by ॐ Hemz ॐ on Jul 6, 2010 4:33:53 GMT -5
Jah,
This is a fine piece that is experimental and creative. I liked the way the piece sounds and begin to imagin a space filled with blank existence. This poem engaged me when I have no full understanding and can ask myself questions about its meaning.
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Post by oursummertrees. on Jul 7, 2010 12:46:32 GMT -5
Jah - this is so creative! I love the way it reads - the repetition of "next examiner" is effective and the ending is just fantastic. Really well done Drops!
-Trees
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Post by lonemuse on Jul 8, 2010 10:06:31 GMT -5
Brilliant and creatively written indeed, well done.
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Post by chizl on Jul 19, 2010 8:12:49 GMT -5
I agree...its an interesting read...a well done drops. =)
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Post by justastranger on Jul 19, 2010 19:02:53 GMT -5
Very mysterious. The title threw me off by miles, I'm not going to lie. I had to read it twice to enjoy it.
But I most certainly did. After the read the title gives me a sense of relation.
I mean, who isn't feeling pain out there?
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