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Post by pinkdictator on Jul 28, 2010 16:19:09 GMT -5
She can't hope She rages She swears Excepts the raining
She choooses the trigger Smoked A memory Speaks over script
She can't hope This is my first poem using droplets, so I hope you enjoy.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Jul 30, 2010 22:28:12 GMT -5
Great to see a new face in the Drops It's a unique and challenging way to write poetry and I think you've done a good job with this. I liked the simplicity of it, the repetition of she can't hope really worked for me
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Post by inflames on Aug 6, 2010 10:33:06 GMT -5
I think you did this rather well. You captured the emotions. =)
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Post by rayofsun on Aug 6, 2010 11:04:57 GMT -5
A great effort for your first...I really liked the line "She chooses the trigger". A flood of images came into my head when I read it. Repeating the first and last line makes this feel like even though this is short, it is complete.
rae
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Post by pinkdictator on Aug 7, 2010 16:17:22 GMT -5
Thank you for reading. I'm glad you guys enjoyed.
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