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Post by tyronec on Aug 2, 2010 16:45:24 GMT -5
darling heresy wandering north. capitalism warrants a brick. flies beneath widest examiner, barks down faithful audience, rages after constant trigger, steers vessel, northern void. pumps blackmail, admirable blackmail.
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Post by inflames on Aug 6, 2010 10:37:09 GMT -5
great ending- I think "blackmail" was a popular word this time round. I thought this was great. =)
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Post by rayofsun on Aug 6, 2010 11:10:05 GMT -5
I agree about the ending...it looks great and sounds great. I am wondering when did capitalism take on such negative connotations? And why?
rae
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Post by ॐ Hemz ॐ on Aug 10, 2010 5:38:00 GMT -5
I love how despite restricted word-choice, so many different uses make such original poetry. This reads very well and the subtle repetion of the word "blackmail" adds to the strength of this piece. Thank you.
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Post by tyronec on Aug 11, 2010 16:24:31 GMT -5
thank you all
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Post by bobbyjohnson on Aug 13, 2010 18:24:20 GMT -5
"capitalism warrants a brick" Sometimes Id like to throw a brick at it to, Im not sure if thats what you meant though.... good one!
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Post by tyronec on Aug 21, 2010 12:59:37 GMT -5
aha, it was a reference to rioting, revolution ect (:
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Post by isoldebot on Nov 4, 2010 23:54:17 GMT -5
You're brilliant. "barks down faithful audience", "admirable blackmail" are my favorite lines. Well played.
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