Ade
Established Muse
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Post by Ade on Jun 25, 2011 21:32:51 GMT -5
In open water he floundered Problems floated to the surface She is a star Air under water
Shoes removed Coat opened Suit loosened Skin bared
Children swimming inside Each other splashed Each other, dove past The bright floor tiles He lifted, she flipped He tousled, she kicked Each leading the other over the edge
Problems evaporated when he threw her off Returned to the sea
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Post by ~k~(tornadoes) on Jul 2, 2011 6:54:34 GMT -5
I absolutely love this...really lovely
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Post by cafeboy on Jul 2, 2011 10:05:55 GMT -5
I love the transitions in this
Shoes removed Coat opened Suit loosened Skin bared
He lifted, she flipped He tousled, she kicked
Very clever indeed.
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Post by ladylilith ~stalwart~ on Jul 4, 2011 13:41:11 GMT -5
Gorgeous! I was overtaken by the sensation of being in the water. These are clever drops! Like cafeboy, those transitions work a treat. Very effective.
Nicely done!
Lily^^
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Post by allmirth on Jul 29, 2011 13:23:55 GMT -5
This is quite wonderful. I love the imagery, emotion and layers here. Exalt! Thanks for sharing. Mirth
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Post by underwhelming on Aug 8, 2011 7:46:09 GMT -5
This is very well done. Clever.
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