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Post by Riverrose ~April!!!~ on Jul 14, 2011 9:48:20 GMT -5
Eyes opened, Lifted past the bright flipped sea- In open water floated stars, Shining bright today, black in the past When steps formed, head pushed under the surface To a confusing black.
She kicked off the lion's teeth, Evaporated, pushed back to the edge The black inside, Loosened, removed the coat World's problems pushed to she. Shrugged it off, the bared teeth Flounder and returned, wildly dove, swimming Past the surface to the silent black pools.
Smelled fresh the air, The stars threw shining Back to bright eyes the white.
Over fresh steps, under the stars shining, The bright eyes opened, dash white over floundering.
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Post by ladylilith ~stalwart~ on Jul 15, 2011 16:22:51 GMT -5
Beautiful as ever River.. I've said it before and I'll say it again - You are the Queen of Drops!
I love that second stanza, but the whole piece feels so lush and imagination capturing.
Impressive stuff! Bravo, m'lady, bravo.
Lily^^
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Post by bcoyotey on Jul 15, 2011 22:12:49 GMT -5
Exalts Rosie. This poem could stand alone on its own merit in any board, and to think it is a Drops leaves me in sheer amazement. Lady B
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Post by Created2Write on Jul 17, 2011 17:22:26 GMT -5
Awesome drop and not just cliche'- this holds poetic merit, not just words thrown together. Very impressive
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Post by dragonfilth on Sept 30, 2011 8:41:56 GMT -5
Exalt pending Rose very well done very well done the words you were given to use... what a master with stitching words Exalt paid
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Post by littlewiseowl on Oct 15, 2011 9:48:14 GMT -5
Amazing =]
Fantastic imagery and I love the layout =]
Exalt x
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