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Post by Sir Daniel on Oct 15, 2011 19:02:48 GMT -5
S H E W A L K S I N S I D E W A T E R[/font]
She walks inside water The world is open problems surface Why is the lion under the floor?
White skin, black suit Silent maids barking Shining shoes Quickly, open the front door..
Lead the children Lift the pail Walk where stars evaporate March back to the sea
Loosening pocketbooks Over fictional surfaces The dove swims to the surface Why won't she?
© 2011
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 16, 2011 3:25:18 GMT -5
Sir Dan, a pleasure to see you visit the drops. This was beautiful, well crafted with a lovely fluidity to it. Really adored that opening and the thirs stanza. Gorgeous drops piece.
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Post by bcoyotey on Oct 16, 2011 15:31:41 GMT -5
Gorgeous poetry DaZzY. I love the ethereal quality in the writing and I can't believe it rhymes. I have never seen a rhyming drops before. I applaud you! Fabulous work. Exalt. Lady B
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Post by - Moirae - on Oct 23, 2011 15:04:53 GMT -5
Daniel, I loved this drops by you. That opening stanza floored me. Lovely work.
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Post by ~k~(tornadoes) on Oct 29, 2011 3:54:53 GMT -5
I love this! Wow
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Post by shiz♥k3sa on Nov 2, 2011 8:20:14 GMT -5
Love it. This is so cool. Makes me want to try out a drop or two.
~shiz
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Post by ॐ Hemz ॐ on Nov 8, 2011 9:17:41 GMT -5
Pure brilliance. I enjoyed this very much Sir Daniel.
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