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Post by Riverrose ~April!!!~ on Oct 20, 2011 19:44:28 GMT -5
Open eyes, tough, stars lifts bright hair Good jelly jars inside the pail. Bright, baring it to pooling air- Fresh! Won't children sprint in houses? He throws stars in the world's eyes! Cannonballs in pools Confusing problem's ties, Splashes nurse, cools Flopped Newfoundland tails!
She forms the shining weather. She, the nest's lion, flips the fresh eggs, Splashes the boy bright, wildly throws the house's tousled walls. Kicks eggs' white- Smells the barn barking.
Quick quick quick! Family lawn flounders under children shoes! Coats removed, loosened shoes kicked off the hill Flop under the barn steps, confuse dashing geese.
Painted walls- Shining bright in each other eye. Smells today quick, the whole house Evaporating barn smells. Floating eyes edge, surface in head bright steps- Work pushed back fiction.
Family- Fresh, open,
Family bright and shining.
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Oct 22, 2011 0:36:42 GMT -5
wow. just wow, darling your drops pieces are always magnificent and this one is my new favourite. That ending was just wonderful.
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Post by shiz♥k3sa on Nov 2, 2011 8:13:37 GMT -5
wow what awesome snippets of family life. I liked this much.
~shiz
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Post by ~k~(tornadoes) on Nov 10, 2011 7:36:33 GMT -5
I felt myself falling into this! What a great write
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Post by thehippyboy on Nov 12, 2011 13:03:15 GMT -5
wow...this is an amazing drop. Exalt. my god.
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