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Post by fionnachtain on Oct 16, 2004 19:53:24 GMT -5
I inhaled sunlight. A fully naked rose Was blossoming in the snow Laid beneath ashes Strong and silent. The softness of my soul Saw cold desire The sun stung as I exhaled Free to cry at myself.
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kelso
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Post by kelso on Oct 17, 2004 0:27:56 GMT -5
Lost me a bit on the last line but still a very nice work. I liked:
...especially.
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Post by (Amaranthine) on Oct 17, 2004 1:22:54 GMT -5
Nice poem Fionnachtain, I like the beginning
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Post by Deleted on Oct 19, 2004 1:12:07 GMT -5
Like the two lines Kelso pointed out as well. Nice work.
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