obscure radience
Wandering Muse
" I have become insane with long intervals of sanity" poe
Posts: 36
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Post by obscure radience on Jun 9, 2007 17:32:33 GMT -5
The Perfect Farewll was a beautiful freedom from an abandon compainon, The smile she broke my mesmerized comfort with, dove my passion to a cancer in the innocence fashioned of my believing the idea that she had in our powerful trance
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Post by ParadoxInk on Jun 10, 2007 0:58:11 GMT -5
this was okay..but the structure needs to be fix
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Post by mywar on Jun 17, 2007 3:20:49 GMT -5
Trippy, not sure if you meant it to read like that or not...
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obscure radience
Wandering Muse
" I have become insane with long intervals of sanity" poe
Posts: 36
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Post by obscure radience on Jun 18, 2007 16:10:53 GMT -5
well i've discovered most poetry at least in my mind is meant to mean what the reader takes it as but thank you
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Post by Astarael ~ Enduring on Sept 9, 2007 21:18:53 GMT -5
interesting, nice work.
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