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I cry
Jun 11, 2005 23:35:46 GMT -5
Post by knd12492 on Jun 11, 2005 23:35:46 GMT -5
I cry blue tears,in a silent battle The frigid truth beneath my soul is sad Can you see i am cold,gray,dead; a girl haunted with a secret I saw your heart smile but very soon it will break I am falling quietly and I need you to help
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I cry
Jun 12, 2005 19:32:08 GMT -5
Post by Llybian on Jun 12, 2005 19:32:08 GMT -5
Niiiice, I think I like the second to last line best.
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I cry
Jun 12, 2005 20:22:44 GMT -5
Post by knd12492 on Jun 12, 2005 20:22:44 GMT -5
thanx I just started writing poetry
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I cry
Jun 12, 2005 22:55:38 GMT -5
Post by Rose of the Forgotten on Jun 12, 2005 22:55:38 GMT -5
knd1492, The opening line was beautiful, followed by a pretty good piece as well. ^^ Good job.
-- Jus
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