calamir
Established Muse
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Post by calamir on Jun 14, 2006 3:38:39 GMT -5
I added an s to season and star, and changed the tense of met. I also repeated some words. Enjoy!
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Beneath the sun soft daffodil the nutmeg earth found diamond will in heart of seasons heart of scars in joy that dared to meet the stars.
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Post by - Moirae - on Jul 9, 2006 12:02:16 GMT -5
beautiful wording and sort of a quiet poem with so much to say...
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Post by *Whisper* on Jul 24, 2006 15:09:44 GMT -5
Great wording and imagery and also a great flow!
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Post by bcoyotey on Jul 24, 2006 22:15:31 GMT -5
Calamir, This is very pretty. A nice calm feel. Lady B
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