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Post by elibabel on May 21, 2007 20:19:01 GMT -5
Wild trance hypnotic passion believing our world was the night in the park
We ran through the grass sneakers freckled with dirt my hands tender to meet carefree innocence breath warm scent of love let to linger
remember to listen my beautiful angel
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Post by nirodeth on May 23, 2007 4:24:44 GMT -5
That's pretty good. =O I think short sentenced poems are hard to read, but that might be because of my nationality. >_< A good Dop though :]
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Post by elibabel on May 23, 2007 16:36:48 GMT -5
Thank you. If you don't mind me asking what nationality are you?
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Post by nirodeth on May 24, 2007 3:25:34 GMT -5
I'm Dutch. They don't have English as a first language there, so my grammar may be off a slight tad from time to time. :]
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Post by elibabel on May 24, 2007 12:35:29 GMT -5
Oh I didn't know that. That's very interesting thank you for not thinking I am rude. Elibabel
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Post by nirodeth on May 24, 2007 14:30:11 GMT -5
haha anytime :]
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Post by elibabel on May 24, 2007 15:23:40 GMT -5
Oh and by the way welcome to TPS. Elibabel
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Post by mywar on May 24, 2007 22:38:59 GMT -5
Great DOP write.
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Post by Perfect Mess on May 26, 2007 16:52:12 GMT -5
This was very well written. Short poems are hard to understand sometimes..I like them though..because they're so short they tend to let the mind wander a little bit about what is taking place..it lets the imagination grow i guess..great write :]
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Post by itsonlyme on Jun 29, 2007 3:21:26 GMT -5
What a soft and lovely piece!
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Post by mystuff2 on Jul 15, 2007 18:30:47 GMT -5
Mark well memories such as this one, for they will never come again. Well Done!
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naezs
Wandering Muse
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Post by naezs on Jul 16, 2007 1:04:14 GMT -5
Amazing job!
I get a great little play inside my head when I read this... very well written DoP my friend!
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